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I would cut
just to feel the pain
just to know
that my life was worth it

Every inch on my arm
every inch on my leg
I would cut
just to feel the pain deep inside

To watch the blood pour down
to cry in happiness
I would cut
just to know that I still feel

Cutting my skin
burning it completely
I would suffer in agony
just to see if I still feel

Every scar that is there
every inch that I cut
it just proves
how much my life was worth it

I would cut
just to feel the pain
to know that Im still alive
to know that I still feel

Feeling of pain
feeling of torture
I would cut
to know that I still feel
In this world...
A poem about Self-Harm, that I used to do, but not anymore
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What a representative poem.

I would like to start off by saying there actually is a mistake in the poem (though I've guessed it was only a typo, and didn't actually take it into account), i.e. "Im" in line 19.

The "entry" into the poem was a little abrupt, giving a fairly mediocre first impression of the text as a whole. This is a sorry fact, because it turns out to be very tactful and relevant in the end.

Essentially, there were three words in this poem that baffled me a lot. These, respectively, were "burning", "agony" and "torture". While cutting is a very common way to harm one self in the process of self-harm, burning definitely isn't (as far as I know). This seems to show a fair experience and trustworthiness of the poet regarding the subject. The same applies to "agony" and "torture", which seem to separate the one that inflicts the pain from the one upon whom it is inflicted--I happen to know, from experience, that this is a very actual and prominent feeling.

While on the topic, I must say that I personally dislike the unconventional way of using the verb "(to) cut" intransitively...though that is purely a matter of opinion.

Furthermore, it is rather refreshing to see a poem that doesn't try and reach two-hundred levels of meanings--no, this one is straightforward. Much like cutting oneself.

To sum up: a very actual and relevant poem, representative of the subject, balancing language and poetic impressions adequately. Kudos!

(By the way, please excuse any grammar or spelling mistakes...it's late.)
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Morphine-Cloud Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
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MyLoveForYouEternity Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you
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Van-Dunkelschreiber Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
that seam like a distorted way to test ones ability to feel
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MyLoveForYouEternity Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Yea...
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Felicia-Neko Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I know the feeling..been there too...
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:iconmyloveforyoueternity:
MyLoveForYouEternity Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
...Yea it sucked :hug:
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Felicia-Neko Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
*hug* I hope you're feeling better now
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MyLoveForYouEternity Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I do, thank you, and I hope you do too :hug:
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Felicia-Neko Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
yeah..someday :)
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MyLoveForYouEternity Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:)
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