literature

I am

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I am the light,that will shine through.
I am the ears,that will listen to all.

I am the voices,telling me to keep going.
I am the eyes,that sees the good as well as evil.

I am a daughter,to a hurtful family.
I am a sister,to a brother that doesn't care.

But I am strong,when those think I'm weak.
I am alive,to find my path to the light.

I am unique,in every aspect of my life.
I am creative,when I find the joy to do so.

I am me,and that's all I care about.
I am beautiful,even if depression tells me otherwise.

Despite of my past,I am still here to this day.
To fight the battle of depression

I will always be me,a strong woman there is.
I will find my path into the light,and that is when I'm finally free
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You should go through and fix up the comma's and the capital letters.

"I am the light
That will shine through.
I am the ears
That will listen to all."

It makes the poem flow better. Just a suggestion though. ANother one would be to shorten the poem by adding two stanzas together since two lines in one stanza is one sentence.

"I am the light that will shine through,
I am the ears that will listen to all,
I am the voices telling me to keep going.
I am the eyes that sees the good as well as evil."

I love the poem, and I love the message. I do think that it would catch more peoples eyes if it was in a different format. Thank you for posting, I enjoyed reading it. <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt=":)" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="391" title=":) (Smile)"/>